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    dots Submission Name: The Virus and his Rosedots

    Author: essence of life
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 33/38/21
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    dotsThe Virus and his Rosedots

    Once upon a time. . . . A very important person, in my life, called me a "virus."

    This wasn't so bad until one day i got a glimpse of something "breathtaking."

    It was a black rose, covered in thorns, in a field of red roses.

    I got a look at this object once through a telescope.

    At once i couldn't advert my gaze. In this field stood an object, shimmering in the moonlight dripping the first sign of morning dew.

    As time moved on i became infatious. Not of something flashy, or flamboyant.

    No more of a specimen, that didn't even know its beauty had me " on strings like some puppet"

    "Now understand that i have never given in too anything closely resembling obsession, captivation, fascination."

    I won't go so far too say I'm incapable of being seduced, But i never thought i wasn't incapable of breaking a bond, In fact i usually liked them too much to dare, But even i. . . . can be proven wrong.

    I must of lost . . . 2 many hours of sleep till the moment i could take no more. Literally. . . I came flying out of bed one night, mind in a whirl, body covered in sweet, heart beating out of my chess.

    Fear or excitement i could not tell thee.

    I went into the woods got lost so many times, lost so much time, all for something i knew was worth me dying too recover.

    When i came upon the field, there minding it's own almost incapable of knowing of my existence stood the rose.

    Like a boy, afraid of his shadow i stared at the thorns, But like a man Who knew too many a sorrow.

    I gripped the stem, blood leaking down the body of this spell inducing object, I picked my flower.

    The blood of a virus now drenched this infatuation: I should of mention that "virus" i stated means when I'm near you, you stay near me.

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      You're improving! This peice is head and shoulders over some of your older work.

    There are still grammer mistakes, just a few careless mistakes. Not capitalizing an "I" or adding an extra "o" to "to".

    The story line is good, I love the hazy veiw from the narrorators mind. Good Job, Ess.

    | Posted on 2010-02-02 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      hey this was really cool
    i also like the black rose and its a very rare and the most beautiful of them all
    i liked the whole story line
    great write sandman
    | Posted on 2010-02-02 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]

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