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    dots Submission Name: Tainted Minddots

    Author: GhiHaD
    ASL Info:    22/Male/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 46/64/24
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Ask me not why are or how i came to think of this... i simply don't know... hahaha

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    dotsTainted Minddots

    The moon has broken
    The night is calling
    Help me my hope is gone
    I can't stop falling


    Awake tired child
    From this dream of screams


    The time is nigh
    Time of punishment
    Time of rectification
    Time to die

    I am broken
    I know no means
    We devastate the world with our power
    Dancing in the face of both light and time
    Extinguish the fire our movements create

    Such proverbial definitions torment the mind

    Submitted on 2004-07-22 23:31:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It seems to me that your talking about getting lost in your thoughts, like in a dream, and, try as you might, you just can't bring yourself back to reality. I think it is a good picture of teenagers today.
    | Posted on 2004-07-23 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      Oooo. This was great. I really wish you knew how you came up with this. I'd love to hear it.

    Other than the final line, my favorite was this:
    "I am broken
    I know no means"
    I just FELT it. You know? Awesome work.
    | Posted on 2004-07-22 00:00:00 | by LadyInRed88 | [ Reply to This ]
      thanks for your words on tainted mind... you got it right my friend, tormenting the mind is the goal twisting the plot back and forth. if you liked it please check some of my others
    | Posted on 2004-07-22 00:00:00 | by GhiHaD | [ Reply to This ]

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