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    dots Submission Name: Visitordots
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    Author: TasteMyRainbow
    ASL Info:    17/Male/In your pants.
    Elite Ratio:    5.07 - 21/22/17
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 581
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 715



    Description:
       Just a little fun poem


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    dotsVisitordots
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    The shadows leak light into my room.
    All I can do is dream of doom.

    Constant nightmares wake my dreams.
    This is not exactly how it is supposed to seem.

    I heard a voice, on that forsaken night.
    Sending me into a frivolous fright.

    It called out in a marvelous roar.
    Reminding me of a devious carnivore.

    I screamed a bothered shrill;
    Giving him quite the thrill.

    We both jumped in fear,
    For we realized, we were much too near.

    Face to face we stood.
    Ready to fight we could.

    All night long..
    Or at least until the nightingale sang it’s song…





    Submitted on 2010-02-02 15:42:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ohh, i like this one!
    Has a rhyme scheme and everything!
    Kinda reminds me of a ghost i have as a friend back at home.
    YES IM CRAZY!..i kid.
    No but, its very fluent..and i think you did a good ass job on this one.

    Kudos ;3
    | Posted on 2010-02-10 00:00:00 | by clarywhite wolf | [ Reply to This ]


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