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Just a little fun poem
The shadows leak light into my room.
All I can do is dream of doom.
Constant nightmares wake my dreams.
This is not exactly how it is supposed to seem.
I heard a voice, on that forsaken night.
Sending me into a frivolous fright.
It called out in a marvelous roar.
Reminding me of a devious carnivore.
I screamed a bothered shrill;
Giving him quite the thrill.
We both jumped in fear,
For we realized, we were much too near.
Face to face we stood.
Ready to fight we could.
All night long..
Or at least until the nightingale sang it’s song…
Submitted on 2010-02-02 15:42:13
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Ohh, i like this one!
Has a rhyme scheme and everything!
Kinda reminds me of a ghost i have as a friend back at home.
YES IM CRAZY!..i kid.
No but, its very fluent..and i think you did a good ass job on this one.
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