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    dots Submission Name: Will Not Say Goodbyedots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsWill Not Say Goodbyedots
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    From time to time absent minded
    I allow control to stray
    And end up searching for the pain
    That I find every day

    I asked for this, one might say
    But I just want to remember you
    Broken heart and shattered dreams
    Pose a veil I can't see through

    But I only asked for you
    They say time will heal, though
    I feel it erasing our time together
    But I don't want to let that go

    And judgement is a wryful jest
    Stop telling me how to handle this
    Or to search for something better
    I've looked and found that nothing is

    And the pain is a reminder of you
    And your memory brings the pain
    And although sometimes I lose my mind
    I am still somewhat sane

    And I am afraid to say goodbye
    And I can't say hello
    So I won't say a word
    As I'm watching you go




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