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    dots Submission Name: Progressiondots
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    Author: passionatepen
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 6/5/6
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 332
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 710



    Description:
       moving on from loss of love


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    dotsProgressiondots
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    I am killing you,
    with each anguished breath,
    every hungry movement,
    absorbing space,
    untainted by your touch,
    every undeniable reflection,
    of your bliss, abandoned.

    I am killing you,
    expelling your intoxicating scent,
    from every pore,
    my burning skin screaming, struggling,
    against remembrance,
    against desire,
    against your knowledge of me.

    Remnants of my captivation remain,
    a scattered ruin of old wounds,
    now less frequented.
    I am no longer a casualty,
    of your artifice,
    my depths embrace promise.

    I am killing you,
    and freeing myself.




    Submitted on 2010-02-03 14:57:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Love the enthusiasm in this. Amazing atmosphere all in all. Words used in it are unreal, and the whole poem in itself is just out of this world. The only thing I would object to, is its to damned short! Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2010-02-03 00:00:00 | by faded color | [ Reply to This ]
      OMG! I love your description. amazingly written.
    I have lyrics that would go great with this
    "so cut my wrist and black my eyes so I can fall alseep tonight.."
    by:hawthrone Heights
    -Rachel:)
    | Posted on 2010-02-03 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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