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    dots Submission Name: Cute Little Vampiredots
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    Author: xAngeliquex
    ASL Info:    15/Female/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 14/14/30
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Misc/Vampire
    Total Views: 638
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1031



    Description:
       Lyrics or poem? Again I don't know.

    Twisted, isn't it.
    :)


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    dotsCute Little Vampiredots
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    Yeah she's smart but she hates you.
    She doesn't want your heart.

    Ha, all she wants to do is tear you apart.

    She'll bite your neck and take a sip of blood,

    Licking her lips she'll say "I want more,"

    Her seductive tone will keep you coming back,

    Hot breath on your neck you kind of lost track..
    of those thoughts about escaping

    Take one step back and run
    She won't stop having fun:


    Until there is none left of that hot liquid that comes from your neck...

    By now there are bites all over your chest,

    Your skin is pale your out of breath;

    There's a smile on her face,
    Her tongue will trace
    over red tainted lips.

    She can not live without this.

    Your blood was her desire and now that there's no more...
    She'll leave your dead body lying on the floor. <3




    Submitted on 2010-02-03 15:26:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You have a really amazing voice. Aside from grammatical errors and superfluous phrases, it was an enjoyable read. I really like it. c;
    | Posted on 2010-03-28 00:00:00 | by RaptureRequiem | [ Reply to This ]


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