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    dots Submission Name: The Book of Orpheusdots
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    Author: orpheus
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 188/165/57
    Words: 377
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Legend
    Total Views: 644
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 2538



    Description:
       I'm composing an album and this is one of the opening tracks, set to Mobb Deep's ~Thug Muzic~...Enjoy :)


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    dotsThe Book of Orpheusdots
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    When I write rhymes I'm never straining,
    I'm levitating,
    Like Tibetan monks or Eminem when,
    He found his mum's medication.
    This is my natural high so tactically
    Premeditated.
    Predetermined destiny,
    The pen, the verse, the melody.
    Got the boogie just like the man,
    Trust the plan when I don the hoodie.
    No gun in hand is needed,
    Pugalistic combatant elitest.
    Hit the streets just like Adidas,
    Three Rhymes your out,
    on route to sequence my sequence no doubt(no doubt)
    Not a shroud of evidence,
    In contradiction.
    Lost the fiction in clouds of sentences,
    Resound, it's effortless.
    Top of the food chain,the Predator.
    Editor of my future life story,
    White African adventurer.
    Who became the emperor,
    Of his own heart and mind,
    Though both at times,
    Were a little more than hard to find.
    Crossed the dark divide,
    Used the stars to navigate.
    The desert becomes an oasis,
    And I start to salivate.
    Cause at last I have it made,
    I can take care of the family.
    laid ta rest all of the tragedy,
    Replaced the face of Jane Calamity.
    Unlawful hap hazzardly,
    Harrassing me,
    Thoughful rap magically,
    bought me back to reality.
    Come Full circle rotating like our galaxy,
    Carry these Sword scarred Journals tattoo'd to' the brain.
    Warrior poet been boo'd off the stage it's,
    taboo but I've faced it, true adversity's my favourite.
    The flavour is a knuckle sand'a'wich taste the fist,
    And Savour it.
    Behavourisms of one in a labour prison released,
    Then Ordained with Lyrics to preach.
    Braved the strange days so bleak,
    To bare this cross on my back.

    "I'll write my name into the book of life,
    Sign on the dotted line,
    Lick the nib
    Did it quick just in the nick of time.
    God smiles on me,
    And says 'you sure took your time'
    Devil tried to kill me 9 times,
    But I wouldn't die!
    So I wrote my name into the book of life,
    Signed on the dotted line
    Licked the nib,
    Did it quick just in the nick of time.
    God smiled on me,
    forgiving giving me the time,
    To sit down with you today
    to sing this hook and rhyme"




    Submitted on 2010-02-04 04:31:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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