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    dots Submission Name: bare skindots
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    Author: bubblegumsweety
    ASL Info:    18 -born in Cali -chick
    Elite Ratio:    1.33 - 3/2/3
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 644
    Average Vote:    2.0000
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    dotsbare skindots
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    I feel it pushing me its trusting with my breath
    the colsness aginst my stomach
    the unity between me and the water
    how i yern for the freedom to stay

    the smell of salt
    the rythm of my heart beating with it
    it makes me feel diffrent

    like im flawless its waves cut away my problems
    my fears and worries are no more
    it saves me from drownin in the sea of civilization
    im safe craddled and rocked by its body

    living in the illusuon i dont need anyone as long as the love of surfing the open waves is in me




    Submitted on 2010-02-04 16:14:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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