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    dots Submission Name: A broken heartdots
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    Author: gothgirl101
    ASL Info:    18/F/Pelham,AL
    Elite Ratio:    1.99 - 10/41/17
    Words: 240
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 707
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1384



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    dotsA broken heartdots
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    It all ended with a new years kiss.
    It was the longest drive of my life.
    Sitting wondering what i did wrong.
    Dealing with a huge pain that felt like a knife

    A week before you had told me that you loved me.
    You made me the happiest that I've ever been.
    But somehow you decided to change your mind.
    And left me with the worst start to 2010.

    I remember the night you got a new boyfriend.
    I remember the tears falling like they were rain.
    I really thought that you would be different.
    But just like the others you just left me with pain.

    I should have known better than to fall so hard.
    I should have known you were playing with my heart.
    But like a deer in the headlights I didn't do a thing.
    I just sat and watched you as you broke me apart.

    Every time i think I'm over you I see your face again.
    It kills me inside knowing that you never even cared.
    I gave you my heart hoping you would not hurt me.
    But you left me with a heart that can't be repaired.

    I hope someone breaks your heart like you did mine.
    You will come running to me wanting another chance.
    And I will make you realize what you did to me.
    Show you that you missed out on a perfect romance.




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      im really sorry that you had to go through this, and i know just how painful it is. my mum once told me that its a part of growing up, a part that i wished i could of lived without. i hope everything is ok for you now.
    | Posted on 2010-12-15 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      Vengeance is thine
    Thou wilt repay
    Like a cloud full of fangs
    At the end of the day

    And if he comes running
    Toward his last known delight
    You'll spring like a mantis
    And turn out the light
    | Posted on 2010-02-17 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      omg that is beatiful it nearky made me cry
    i loved it
    | Posted on 2010-02-12 00:00:00 | by xxdellybooxx | [ Reply to This ]


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