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I'm not going to dwell on any of it, but i needed to get it off my chest.
how can you ask me if
you're still differnet from the rest
knowing what you hid inside
lying like the best
i knew you'd be a cheater
but i hoped not two weeks in
you say i built us on a lie
but i remember that weekend
it defined the way i feel
how I knew you'd break my heart
and you've completed the circle,
how soon we've reached the start
it isn't even lies for me
but how quick you were to run
like you can't sit through adversity
when these past few months weren't fun
you expect me to give everything
and i'm wondering for what
you've brought nothing to the table
save for ever-growing cuts
I'm a dirty fucking liar
told you what you want to hear
but my feelings haven't changed
they won't in twenty years
I am the man I always was
and I won't apologize
I don't care what you find normal
when will you realize
nothing about me has been that way
not a moment in my life
I won't buckle under this duress
so put away the fucking knife
i mean what did you expect
when you ignore how i feel?
no matter how i try to reason
it couldn't always have been real
you feed off the control
and the conflict had to end some way
I'd never actually give up
but you led yourself astray.
Submitted on 2010-02-06 00:16:56
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well i will say that the description is the key, you won't dwell because you already have....
I'm a dirty [censored] Liar
i think the L should be capitalized....
i like Bukowski
i like the redundancy in the title because it is a vulgar poem, but i think you have to change somehow on what it is a stray or astray their can be no opportunity for misinterpretation
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