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    dots Submission Name: 2012dots
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    Author: Diablo Tapitio
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 85/111/62
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 626
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 912



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    dots2012dots
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    Children of the sun, dance now in the light,
    walk with the giants, dance now in plain sight.
    the end is upon us and your time is now at hand,
    so dance with me children as man makes his final stand.


    Children of the night, dance under the moon,
    Sing with the ghosts, for the end is coming soon,
    so dance with wonder children, under the star lit sky,
    embrace the cold air, and let the night pass by.


    Children of the woods, dance under the trees,
    the time is upon us, mankind is on its knees,
    so breath the air deep, and dance for life,
    for the time is at hand, time to end all the strife.


    children of time, who hold the hour glass,
    the glass is now empty, mans final mass.
    so dance in the graveyards, and spin in the mist,
    for on this day tomorrow does not exist




    Submitted on 2010-02-06 12:02:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      you misspelled now with know. thats all i have to say about that. but great piece. i enjoyed it nonetheless.
    | Posted on 2010-02-07 00:00:00 | by KindredSpirit | [ Reply to This ]
      I really did like it
    though I don't believe in the 2012 thing
    | Posted on 2010-02-06 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey there! I love this piece! Of course, I love all the work of yours that I've ever read, so it's not really a surprise.

    How you tied everything together is fantastic. The "Children of the..." is probably the best, repetative line I've ever had the pleasure to read. Wonderfully done.

    Keep up the amazing work!

    -Bereft
    | Posted on 2010-02-06 00:00:00 | by bereftXofXheart | [ Reply to This ]


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