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    dots Submission Name: unfinished songdots
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    Author: Dark Dann
    ASL Info:    18/ Male/ San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    6.44 - 78/67/53
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotsunfinished songdots
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    She said I'll never go away
    I said I'll always stand still
    She said I'll never go away
    I can hear her here.

    I thought I found the way
    But it's still the same
    I'm standing here with you
    I never know what to say
    And I'm watching you as go
    lost in my world

    But you said you'll never go away
    Was it just a lie?
    You said I'll never disappear
    will I be alright?




    Submitted on 2010-02-07 15:59:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This sounds like a song i would listen to...promise me youll continue to work on it?
    | Posted on 2014-08-15 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you need to have another look this, --- a few parts of it don't make much sense (to me.)
    The part that worries me most is the last 2 lines of Stanza 2. Sorry about that. Ted.
    | Posted on 2010-02-07 00:00:00 | by edcherry | [ Reply to This ]


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