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    dots Submission Name: T.B.C...dots

    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 75/182/213
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Once upon a time ago, I felt as if I was the only thing that was important to me.
    Infecting infatuation with a mirror being.
    Words, I can hear the ripping, the snapping of my heart strings.
    Sweetie, I am more than ordinary.
    Why did your words lacerate, contort and strangle...
    I'm not sickening.
    I'm not the virus you speak of.

    The notes and letters to myself have subsided.
    I caught a glimpse, I fell to my knees, blindsided.

    That rose so black, it calls to me.
    A sirens grasp so dark and alluring.
    I will watch from a window, cracked open, moonlight pale and shimmering dew at dawns first light.

    Once upon my wall sat a clock,
    just ticking away each moment I sat in dismay.
    That crimson field sways,
    a marionette I am just pulled by that black rose in my dreams.
    Just to hold it would complete me once again.
    Like having her brush close to my skin,
    like a thorn she tore me thin.

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