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    dots Submission Name: At the zoodots
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    Author: AshKetchumLuv
    ASL Info:    17/Ladeh/Nonyabeezwax
    Elite Ratio:    6.63 - 14/15/12
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Haiku/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 609
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 627



    Description:
       I had gone to the zoo today, and I remembered how my mother told me that the monkey exhibit had alligators in the water, and how the monkeys would actually jump into it. This was sort of... silly. If you're like "Oh, you're fucking funny", well, buddy, it's not like I'm making it up. It really happened.


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    dotsAt the zoodots
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    I had seen the boat.
    It was floating in the zoo.
    It was different.


    At one time there were
    Monkeys all around, swimming
    but there were problems.


    Was it really smart
    to have alligators there
    surrounding them so?


    The monkeys would jump
    into the water with them.
    They were then eaten.


    Now the boat is worn.
    Evidence of death is there.
    On the sails, stern, bow.


    I saw the water.
    It was really littered with
    leaves, dirt, monkey guts.




    Submitted on 2010-02-07 18:11:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ewww lol that kinda gross. and kinda stupid for the zoo to let alligators near the monkeys but whatever lol it made for and interesting poem and proof that monkeys aren't that smart. cool :)
    | Posted on 2010-02-09 00:00:00 | by insanegemini | [ Reply to This ]


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