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    dots Submission Name: Sericulturedots

    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.77 - 417/433/131
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    silk worms are not worms at all
    but mulberry leaf stuffed
    bombyx mori--a species of caterpillar
    boiled from cocoon
    so as not to damage
    the fine thread
    by emerging


    love untrue is a silken sheath
    a chrysalis case
    pupa stifled
    Silk Road
    paved with carcasses of failed flight

    Submitted on 2010-02-07 19:50:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow that last comment by rws really contributed to the piece. That was a nice surpsrise.

    I feel that this piece is very well structured, very original, very true to nature in form and content and thus wonderful to read.

    Thanks for sharing,

    Lovely day wishes to you
    | Posted on 2011-09-15 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      ...and that which doesn't evolve decays...
    | Posted on 2011-08-12 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Thanks Jane for an excellent poem. I enjoy your work. You manage to reach that moment of truth that is so fleeting.
    | Posted on 2010-03-02 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      I am reminded of a subtle elegance percieved in living creatures that posess a freedom we can only dream of. The instinctual actions of these beings mock us as we can never be as real as them in the ways we live and move. We are stuck in a cycle of days that hinder us with their shortness and a losing of identity as we become more integrated into the system that is society.

    I enjoyed this.
    | Posted on 2010-02-08 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
      This has a beautifully quiet resonance to it, and how it starts off almost like a treatise only to end with such significance.

    Yes, beautifully quiet. It speaks for itself, and so I won't ramble on about it. The only thing I might suggest is to have everything in lower caps, but that is a small thing.

    | Posted on 2010-02-08 00:00:00 | by Lady of Shalott | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really good.


    it makes me i think of never quite being free.

    and how the word stifle is a killer.

    | Posted on 2010-02-07 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]

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