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    Author: Aylar
    ASL Info:    17/ female/ Oregon
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 4/5/3
    Words: 256
    Class/Type: Lyrics/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 936
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    Oohwoah ohhhh Oh woah. {repeat 2x}

    The same four walls keep screaming at me
    Telling me lies about the world outside
    They preach a world of love and tenderness
    The likes of which i can only dream,
    Yet this world of peace and love
    Has yet to be found

    That is the truth to this world

    No love, only hate
    {Its Permitted}
    No mercy, only fear.
    {Its Permitted}
    No emotions, only emptiness
    Drowning in my tears
    But in the end I must remember that everything,
    and I mean everything,
    is permitted...

    {Guitar solo}

    Believe me baby if it exists,
    Its only a world of make believe
    Its whispers and fairy tales
    nothing like youd believe

    That is the truth to this world
    No love, only hate
    {Its Permitted}
    No mercy, only fear.
    {Its Permitted}
    No emotions, only emptiness
    Drowning in my tears
    But I must remember that everything,
    and I mean everything, is permitted...

    So these walls try to coax me into believing
    Try to help me keep faith in a dying world
    To these walls I say thank you
    For trying to keep me sane
    For having faith in a world so cold
    The truth, though, is nothing

    But That is the truth to this world

    No love, only hate
    {Its Permitted}

    No mercy, only fear.
    {Its Permitted}

    No emotions, only emptiness
    Drowning in my tears
    But I must remember that everything,
    and I mean everything, is permitted...




    Submitted on 2010-02-08 00:00:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      
    | Posted on 2010-02-08 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes this is the kind of message that makes people feel less alone and more in tune with being understood in a time where feeling alone is commonplace. (marimba solo) Good work.
    | Posted on 2010-02-08 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
      Universal message easy to relate to. (Flute Solo)
    Nice hooks!
    | Posted on 2010-02-08 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]


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