This was very plain, but strikes the right chords, if one reads it with the right feeling. I enjoyed its simplicity. I usually like more complex pieces; however, I respect your form of writing for what it is. Everybody composes in their own way, their own light. I do.
The piece you read was not supposed to accumulate comments. As I mentioned in my commentary request, I said: nothing. However, I do not mind if people still wish to comment. ...I just don't want constructive criticism. The piece was meant to reveal my emotional state on the loss of a beloved abuelo, my grandfather. That is all, all of it. Most of my work is as such. The form of writing means very little to me, all the time.
I do thank you overall however for the comment and your words. I appreciate anything. -and, as I said, I enjoy your work as well.
Good stuff. I like them because of the bare bones approach. I'm so sick of haikus written simply because the writer can't sustain a good idea for more than a few lines. These don't try to be great works of prose, you keep it simple and that's dead cool. There is an implied melody here.