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    dots Submission Name: I'll Soon Be Something Of The Pastdots
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    Author: mdsouza
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 161/110/25
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This was part of our Jr College Economics project - The Great Depression with a focus on the large number of suicides


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    dotsI'll Soon Be Something Of The Pastdots
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    I'll soon be something of the past
    To my dear wife and children.
    But how long will the torture last
    It's a hard world to live in.

    The nation that I once adored
    Has not done me any good.
    She's struck by drought but still goes to war
    At the cost of my livelihood.

    Maybe we would have become slaves
    But at least we wouldn't starve.
    Now I have nothing to sustain you
    What's the good of empty love?

    There now I cannot justify
    This grievous act of mine ..
    But you go ahead, don't ever cry -
    You have the strength and time to shine.

    Children, always help your mama
    Like our little soldier did ..
    He's gone but I'll join him and pray
    That some day your dreams may be fulfilled.

    Perhaps, they'll give you relief
    When they will see you have no man.
    But even if they don't I'll still believe
    That you will make it. Yes you can!

    I've measured my worth in money, something I now regret ..
    But it's too late, I have become so numb.
    There's nothing to rely on; so much crisis, too much debt ..
    To the pressure now, I finally succumb.







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      Many of the adults that I grew up with experienced the Great Depression, and I heard many first hand tales about it. It made one realize what a horrible experience it was, and it was worse for those in large urban centers.

    Nice work on this! It must have been a difficult subject to write on!
    | Posted on 2010-02-10 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      this imagery gives me the mental image of how someone can go thru so much and fall victim to the pressures of life. and yes its possible to look towards a brighter future but if there is no reason or inspirations to keep us motivated...

    I would like to read more of your work that has this feeling in it. Sometimes taking a glimpse of yang can make us appreciate what we really have in front of us

    poet09
    | Posted on 2010-02-10 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]


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