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    dots Submission Name: Brief explorationdots
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    Author: AutumnLeaves
    ASL Info:    26/f/ Cyprus
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 95/103/44
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       A brief love affair....


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    dotsBrief explorationdots
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    Sadness is the aftermath
    Of a
    Brief exploration.
    Summarization,
    Then,
    Generalization; Like all people I fell in
    The sand.
    My eyes were burning
    From the dust-like intrusion
    at a perfect afternoon delight.
    But the lips could taste the sun
    Along with the sea
    In some remorseful ecstasy.
    Then you notice
    As you rise reluctantly
    The way
    Some parts of sand
    Depart your hand,
    To pursue the enigmatic wind,
    And others
    Lag behind
    Or stay
    Like watchful angels of the night.
    Could love be the aftermath
    Of a
    Brief exploration?
    No summarization,
    No generalization,
    But
    Sand.
    A simple rain of microscopic cubes
    Of sand,
    All-embracing,
    Ever-remaining.




    Submitted on 2010-02-09 17:37:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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