[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Brief explorationdots

    Author: AutumnLeaves
    ASL Info:    26/f/ Cyprus
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 95/103/44
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 660
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 880

       A brief love affair....

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsBrief explorationdots

    Sadness is the aftermath
    Of a
    Brief exploration.
    Generalization; Like all people I fell in
    The sand.
    My eyes were burning
    From the dust-like intrusion
    at a perfect afternoon delight.
    But the lips could taste the sun
    Along with the sea
    In some remorseful ecstasy.
    Then you notice
    As you rise reluctantly
    The way
    Some parts of sand
    Depart your hand,
    To pursue the enigmatic wind,
    And others
    Lag behind
    Or stay
    Like watchful angels of the night.
    Could love be the aftermath
    Of a
    Brief exploration?
    No summarization,
    No generalization,
    A simple rain of microscopic cubes
    Of sand,

    Submitted on 2010-02-09 17:37:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    You do, I Do written by poetotoe
    Wavelength written by saartha
    True Death written by layDsayD
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Dashboard Light written by layDsayD
    Bond written by saartha
    Fasade written by jackz
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    Still Fighting See? written by ForgottenGraves
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    Linger written by saartha
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    AI written by poetotoe
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    Estranged / Shocks written by Daniel Barlow
    Summer written by layDsayD




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]