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    dots Submission Name: just like tonightdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 342
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
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    dotsjust like tonightdots
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    what do you do when every night
    feels like the last night
    i know i have to go and i want to end it in a fight
    just like tonight
    so you dont remember all the good times
    so you dont have to know how hard i try
    so you dont have to know how i felt so alone
    so you dont have to know how your light shown
    the first day we met was like a miracle
    cuz i prayed to god you dont go
    never let me go
    but its too late for prayers i gotta do what i do
    like the game keeps me true
    even though im feelin so blue
    i gotta go and never return like its never nothin new
    and i wish i could stay
    even if its just to play
    a little longer than we have
    but i know youll end up sayin you love me
    and im sorry but i love you too
    as in also cuz i already got a boo
    and even though
    hes gone and locked away from me now
    it doesnt matter cuz his path is the only one i know
    how to handle
    in these times of defeat and dispair
    i only know the way im going
    and dont have time to be fair
    and sorry if it hurts cuz it hurts me too
    and im sorry if youre feelin blue
    cuz i am too
    and as much as i know this love is true
    there aint shit i can do
    cuz my destiny was fortold
    before i had a chance
    coulda been married a year ago
    but still cant dance
    i wish i could help or do something right
    but as tonight
    is our last night
    please baby lets not fight
    just hold me tight
    and let me know that its all okay
    you may not understand but you will one day
    cuz ill invite you to the ending
    and with that ill say
    that i really did love you
    even if i cant stay




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