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    dots Submission Name: Oh, Welldots
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    Author: The Wolverine
    ASL Info:    23/M/MA
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 74/137/91
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsOh, Welldots
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    Stuck in a well
    well, looks like rain
    last stop on life's
    one-way train

    the only way is down
    unless the rain keeps up
    a true optimist's dilemma
    how full or empty is this deadly cup

    tired muscles beg for rest
    drenched in harmless water
    lethal poison in excess

    dying for a drink yet
    determined not to sink
    born, crawl, tread, dead
    try to keep the head up
    and remain afloat

    no tombstone for the drowned
    and that's all she wrote




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