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    dots Submission Name: Oh, Welldots
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    Author: The Wolverine
    ASL Info:    23/M/MA
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 74/137/91
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsOh, Welldots
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    Stuck in a well
    well, looks like rain
    last stop on life's
    one-way train

    the only way is down
    unless the rain keeps up
    a true optimist's dilemma
    how full or empty is this deadly cup

    tired muscles beg for rest
    drenched in harmless water
    lethal poison in excess

    dying for a drink yet
    determined not to sink
    born, crawl, tread, dead
    try to keep the head up
    and remain afloat

    no tombstone for the drowned
    and that's all she wrote




    Submitted on 2010-02-09 20:40:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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