"Heed this warning heed it well
Along with me you'll burn in hell."
Yes. Oh my goodness, I love this line. It is the absolutely perfect way to end this piece. Kudos to you!
I do say that I enjoyed reading this so much. I'm going to favorite it as soon as I'm done with this.
I am assuming that you had used your phone again? Then I do understand why it is as it is. So I will not punch at your grammar or anything this time. Sorry about that, by the way. O-o
And I absolutely L-O-V-E-D how the last line for each stanza fit into the next one. It's so creative. I mean, I hadn't noticed at first until about the third stanza, and then I had to go back and read to make sure I was reading it right. I don't know if you meant to do that on purpose, but.... but don't change that, okay?
Yes, sweety. I adored this. It is going on my favorites list.
I agree with you on it being more a rant. I get the impression someone has really pissed you off more than anything else. Perhaps, several some ones, in fact. We all have those days I think.
This line here...
"Be miserable but be joyous devious knifing"
I love it. It brings out the evil intent, and it is also where I first got that you were really in a 'mood' if you get my meaning. On the up side I feel this way often myself, so it was great to see someone else does too.
I can truly relate to the self centered teenís line too, it's exactly what I see every day.
It's that little dark side that we all have in us, and I think the ranting of words together like this just lets it out so we can continue on.
On the lower side of it all, the way this began really threw me. I thought for sure it was going to be a good poem, and then you just let loose. That is why I would rather call it a rant.
Perhaps you could use the beginning of this as a new poem you intend to make?