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    dots Submission Name: Help Me Grow.dots
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    Author: TasteMyRainbow
    ASL Info:    17/Male/In your pants.
    Elite Ratio:    5.07 - 21/22/17
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Misc/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 865
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 598



    Description:
       This piece is actually describing myself. The boat I'm caught in. ;|


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    dotsHelp Me Grow.dots
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    The left side of the lawn has grass, but the right doesn't.
    The cow eats the left side grass.
    Then, the right side has grass; but the left doesn't.
    The cow eats the right side grass.
    The never ending process continues for;
    Days.
    Weeks.
    Months.
    Years.
    Decades.
    Just make up your mind.
    Left or right.
    Me or him.
    Even if i can't always satisfy your needs.
    And even if im slowly dying..
    Dont move on; just because someone else can for a while.
    Stay with me; and help me grow.




    Submitted on 2010-02-10 12:56:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      <3<3<3 How I seriously need this right now...even though I'm only 13, it doesn't mean I can't experiance things that I'm too young for...it still happens-
    cause it's life...haha but the funny thing is, it's not us that are making it this way, It's everyone else.
    | Posted on 2011-03-31 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      Aw, this made me frown a little.


    Of course, anyone reading this would- at least, in my opinion- feel some sort of pity for the cow walking back and forth, from one side of the pasture to the other. Well, at first, anyway. But as one reads to the end, you think, "Wow... why, cow? Why would you do that?" And one would furrow their brow and frustration.


    I believe that the narrator saying, "me or him", should probably quit growing for the cow. They should probably work on their photosynthesis in another plain. Some cow would appreciate them. (yeah, I realize I'm holding onto your concept waaaay too hard. =I)


    But what do I know, I'm just a stranger. That was my first impression, my thoughts as I finished reading. Sorry if it's lame.
    | Posted on 2010-02-10 00:00:00 | by AshKetchumLuv | [ Reply to This ]
      Sadly, i know what this is about.
    Even sadder....>.>" The cows not gonna move dude.
    Even if i don't fully know the situation...the cows gonna keep switching back and fourth between the two people.
    Because, it wants to be satisfied fully ;|
    Its not something you can really change, you just might wanna call it off with them.
    Because stressing yourself out over it...will lead you to do something stupid.
    Because were teenagers..and well were all dumb [censored]s ;|
    Haha ;]

    Thats just my take on it.
    Make your cow move to a different farm man ;|
    | Posted on 2010-02-10 00:00:00 | by clarywhite wolf | [ Reply to This ]


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