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    Author: KindredSpirit
    ASL Info:    20, Male, Burlington Iowa
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 54/139/173
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 475
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 954



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    On the darkest night,
    In the darkened field.
    The horrid creature lurks,
    From battlement to battlement.
    Captivated by the endless stream of blood,
    The scent of decayed flesh smells of tar.
    The putrid air sustains the beast,
    Keeping the hunger from rising.

    Out of the bodies a second is born,
    Before the other it should yield.
    Moving to close the distance,
    They move faster onto the next settlement.
    Closing the distances between,
    The fort is seen from afar.
    Jumping over the wall slaughtering them all,
    In a situation so compromising.

    The damage takes its toll,
    The bodies pile and build.
    Teetering on the brink of roll,
    Suspended by stakes and poles.
    The beast's cheer in victory,
    Raising they're swords in the air.
    An army of a thousand,
    Amidst bodies of a million.




    Submitted on 2010-02-10 14:09:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that was pretty cool. And really good. I like it a lot. You should give it a name. Like "Bodies of a million" or something. Ikd, . I wish i could wirte poetry that good.
    | Posted on 2010-02-11 00:00:00 | by Snowtear | [ Reply to This ]


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