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    dots Submission Name: Falling for Lovedots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.48 - 99/55/48
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 657
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    Description:
       The writing may kind of seem confusing but its basically explaining what happens to someone in love who didnít believe it before or have forced themselves to not see it.


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    dotsFalling for Lovedots
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    A trickle of lucid rain
    Courses upon my lips
    Tasting the crimson wine
    Awaking my heartís emotions

    Feeling the fever
    Filling into this cup
    A desireís passion
    Becomes overflowed with lust

    Befalling to these sensations
    Enticed by derisionís sour love
    A vision force by bitterness
    Rises, to claim itís true pedestal




    Submitted on 2010-02-10 16:45:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ...like this very much.

    Maria

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    | Posted on 2010-02-10 00:00:00 | by AutumnLeaves | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece is so passionate-and works againsts its own passion. There are so many words here that channel this "pathos" as we say in Greek, lips ,crimson, fever, desire ect and each contibute to the final outburst of the soul. You poem reminds me of Sara Teasdale's "Over the roofs", one of my favourite poems. Good work, I
    | Posted on 2010-02-10 00:00:00 | by AutumnLeaves | [ Reply to This ]


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