Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Falling for Lovedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.62 - 96/51/46
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 620
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 414



    Description:
       The writing may kind of seem confusing but its basically explaining what happens to someone in love who didnít believe it before or have forced themselves to not see it.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsFalling for Lovedots
    -------------------------------------------


    A trickle of lucid rain
    Courses upon my lips
    Tasting the crimson wine
    Awaking my heartís emotions

    Feeling the fever
    Filling into this cup
    A desireís passion
    Becomes overflowed with lust

    Befalling to these sensations
    Enticed by derisionís sour love
    A vision force by bitterness
    Rises, to claim itís true pedestal




    Submitted on 2010-02-10 16:45:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      ...like this very much.

    Maria

    (ENTER-by mistake:)
    | Posted on 2010-02-10 00:00:00 | by AutumnLeaves | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece is so passionate-and works againsts its own passion. There are so many words here that channel this "pathos" as we say in Greek, lips ,crimson, fever, desire ect and each contibute to the final outburst of the soul. You poem reminds me of Sara Teasdale's "Over the roofs", one of my favourite poems. Good work, I
    | Posted on 2010-02-10 00:00:00 | by AutumnLeaves | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    182840

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Not the Devil, but the Wind written by endlessgame23
    Sword in the Water written by Wolfwatching
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    Live In Between written by teika5
    A Thousand Reflections written by endlessgame23
    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    untitled written by Outlaw
    Beauty Rest written by jackz
    Hyle written by endlessgame23
    Meaningless Meanings written by ForgottenGraves
    Whispered written by endlessgame23
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    The Human Harmonic written by Daniel Barlow
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    The Want written by Daniel Barlow
    Mystery Read written by kyserin
    Ciggarettes written by Poetic_tragedy6
    Dream written by closetpoet
    Gaia written by endlessgame23
    None the Wiser written by endlessgame23
    Rooted in Nature written by Chelebel
    Johnny's Cock written by endlessgame23
    Compartments written by TheStillSilence
    Loop-di-Loop written by endlessgame23
    Night- time written by Daniel Barlow
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry