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Falling for Love


Author: faideddarkness
ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
Elite Ratio:    6.5 - 102 /56 /52
Words: 56
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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The writing may kind of seem confusing but its basically explaining what happens to someone in love who didn�t believe it before or have forced themselves to not see it.


Falling for Love



A trickle of lucid rain
Courses upon my lips
Tasting the crimson wine
Awaking my heart's emotions

Feeling the fever
Filling into this cup
A desire's passion
Becomes overflowed with lust

Befalling to these sensations
Enticed by derision's sour love
A vision force by bitterness
Rises, to claim it's true pedestal




Submitted on 2010-02-10 16:45:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  ...like this very much.

Maria

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| Posted on 2010-02-10 00:00:00 | by AutumnLeaves | [ Reply to This ]
  This piece is so passionate-and works againsts its own passion. There are so many words here that channel this "pathos" as we say in Greek, lips ,crimson, fever, desire ect and each contibute to the final outburst of the soul. You poem reminds me of Sara Teasdale's "Over the roofs", one of my favourite poems. Good work, I
| Posted on 2010-02-10 00:00:00 | by AutumnLeaves | [ Reply to This ]


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