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    Author: brokenmuse
    ASL Info:    26/F/AL
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 756/734/161
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Average Vote:    0.0000
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    shallow skin
    cut me deep
    to let the feelings in

    empty
    just a shell
    living alone
    in my own personal hell

    look
    looking in
    looking into your skin
    and we fall together, briefly
    before we fall apart

    sweet-tasting and toxic
    kisses like glycerine
    you
    and then she is caught
    caught and screaming

    for so long
    caring nothing
    for the world or others
    and in one painful, sharply clear moment
    she twists, like a knife
    as blood is wrung from her heart

    and is caught
    like a fly in a web
    like a lie. like sorrow in the throat
    but the loneliness is so sweet
    so acute
    it makes the memories like gold

    she doesn't even care
    that her dreams wither
    like fruit on an untended vine
    she is so happy... so happy
    so happy to be close
    to that searing, flawless sun

    she can't remember where she stops
    where he'd begun

    losing
    losing losing losing
    is she losing herself?
    does it mean she's lost...
    now that she has no dream?
    or does it mean she's found it all?

    but losing 'what' exactly?




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