Sinking

Author: DarkGunslinger Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 7 /25 /23 Words: 90

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Sinking

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A ship stands empty in the harbor There is no sound The seagulls have all died and all the metal has rusted Men look to the sky for answers and the stars are glass reflecting their shame and fear and all the metal has rusted Fires light the world in orange stained glass blood spills onto the broken concrete and all the metal is rusted A ship stands in an empty harbor there is no sound all the sailors have died and all the metal is rusted

Submitted on 2010-02-10 23:26:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I laughed when you said enjoy or killl yourself then I read the poem and it actually depressed me even though i have no clue why. Anyway This is amazing I love the imagery the flow and how in the last stanza changing two words from the first stanza makes it so much worse to invision. It read so easily and nearly brought me to tears and at the end still left me sitting asking you why in the heck did this make me so freaking sad? I like a write that forces you to think and in its simple way this one does just that. Definatley a fav. Great piece, keep writing. sarah

| Posted on 2010-02-11 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]

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