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    dots Submission Name: Sinkingdots
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    Author: DarkGunslinger
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 7/25/23
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 633
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 570



    Description:
       clearly influenced by Godspeed You! Black Emperor.

    enjoy, or kill yourself. Whatever suits thy fancy.


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    dotsSinkingdots
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    A ship stands empty in the harbor
    There is no sound
    The seagulls have all died
    and all the metal has rusted

    Men look to the sky for answers
    and the stars are glass
    reflecting their shame and fear
    and all the metal has rusted

    Fires light the world in orange
    stained glass blood
    spills onto the broken concrete
    and all the metal is rusted

    A ship stands in an empty harbor
    there is no sound
    all the sailors have died
    and all the metal is rusted




    Submitted on 2010-02-10 23:26:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I laughed when you said enjoy or killl yourself then I read the poem and it actually depressed me even though i have no clue why. Anyway This is amazing I love the imagery the flow and how in the last stanza changing two words from the first stanza makes it so much worse to invision. It read so easily and nearly brought me to tears and at the end still left me sitting asking you why in the heck did this make me so freaking sad? I like a write that forces you to think and in its simple way this one does just that. Definatley a fav. Great piece, keep writing.

    sarah
    | Posted on 2010-02-11 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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