Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Cutting Lucas Offdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Mieko
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 253/209/99
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 598
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 772



    Description:
       It's simple ;D


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsCutting Lucas Offdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Slow process
    I was weary of being a physical object,
    rather than a friend of five years.
    Adolescence began to appear,
    His mother noticed our hormonal adventures (for which I will forever be sorry).

    I stopped trying,
    I lacked respect for him,
    And his cold, clammy hands.
    Red, inquisitive.
    Our friendship crumbled away like ancient architecture,
    I swam in the world of the obscene
    Lying naked on a blanket with another (who wanted only me)
    Surrounded by the cover of trees, an unattractive dream at 15.
    But! I have since forgiven myself...

    My lips had formed the word "no" for the last fucking time
    At least I escaped with my hymen unharmed...




    Submitted on 2010-02-11 01:35:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      thank god for the last two lines hormones aren't to blame for weakness of will,
    sex is for marriage, and as much as it pains me to have to state that,
    the problem is that sex isn't just sex, there is so much shame and guilt and judgment and mockery and lacking of love involved the only real way to know your not being taken for a laugh in the locker room is to not have your pictures taken nor choose to lay with a dude until they prove their fidelity, which is mostly absent in this world
    sorry to be the bearer of bad news
    but men lie about fidelity more than they lie about love...
    which is like the spider and the fly but thats what we do...
    men that is ,,, the bad ones anyway,,, they lie about love to prove falsely fidelity then they cheat and lie more to get their waste out...and into a girl... i hate waste like men like that... good luck young thing...
    | Posted on 2010-02-11 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    182858

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Skin of Fables written by ShadowParadox
    To Glow written by krs3332003
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    Wavelength written by saartha
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    To written by SavedDragon
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch
    Incubus written by monad
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    This written by Chelebel
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    Linger written by saartha
    Wasps written by Wolfwatching
    Ten Poems written by Wolfwatching
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    In My Head written by faideddarkness
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    Push written by JanePlane
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    In the Mouth of Elysium written by HisNameIsNoMore
    In the end written by Janesaddiction
    Our Cinder Crisis written by SavedDragon
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Bond written by saartha
    Trails written by Daniel Barlow

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry