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    dots Submission Name: three limericksdots
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    Author: leocrates
    Elite Ratio:    4.95 - 103/34/38
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Limerick/Depressed
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    Description:
       here are three drafts of limerick that i chose not to submit in a contest ... they are too light on the humor but that doesn't mean the poetry doesn't count...


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    Misery

    There was Once a young Boy
    Til god Tired of his Toy
    Now the Boy is a Man and the Others
    Call him Whore ‘cause they Played god as Brothers
    Now he Curses them as Coy

    Bomb

    Once a man tried to Love,
    But the World would still shove.
    He told them all once “no more they laugh!”
    But he’s Last after First, so idol Calf…
    Be in Hate, death waits Above.

    lush

    Once in March Ol’ St. Patrick
    Drove out Serpents with a stick
    Old men drink whiskey, Drunkards will drink wine
    Young men drink beer and mead ‘til they shine
    But real men drink even sick




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    ||| Comments |||
      This is not the pattern I expected for limericks which might go like so:

    There once was a girl from St. Croy
    who was wishing that she was a boy
    (and so on)

    Other than that and a mirth factor, each of your story lines have potential, topic wise.
    | Posted on 2010-02-23 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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