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    dots Submission Name: Mental Mind Fuck dots

    Author: S.A.M.
    ASL Info:    26/f/xx
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 476/419/137
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       not sure. a look into my mind I just wrote down what i thought of. lol

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    dotsMental Mind Fuck dots

    Try your hand at somthing new
    everything has gotten so old
    pen to paper and nothing there
    backwards steps go unnoticed
    and forwards just to hard to do
    the world crumbles
    trapped beneath
    rebuilds, reversed
    the same old shit
    you can show your kids
    but your life story is not for show
    write your heart out
    nothings there
    stuck in blank dispare
    damn there it goes again
    white noise
    just wanna hear his voice
    one more time
    is it over yet
    he's pissed again

    Submitted on 2010-02-11 13:12:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Write away your history... for nobody will care... Explain your days of glory... so they twist them into shame... Do whatever you need to do... it all ends up the same... Boost your ego all you want... you still are so worthless... Go back and try to fix it... it wont matter in the end... Your soul is still so fragile... just another empty shell.

    That is all... Thank you for posting this...
    | Posted on 2010-11-23 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]
      holy [censored], this is amazing. The almost sing-songy flow lends itself well to the manic pace I imagine when reading it. Of course, it could be read very slowly and just, blaaaaah feeling, in which it's extraordinarily sad. The imagery is so stilted and changes so much, for some reason my first thought was of a mirror breaking into a billion pieces, and each one of those pieces shows a different reflection...if that makes sense.

    If I was still in a punk/grunge band, I would steal these.

    | Posted on 2010-02-11 00:00:00 | by DarkGunslinger | [ Reply to This ]

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