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    dots Submission Name: I Feel Some Kind Of Tremblingdots
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    Author: Eyamma
    ASL Info:    16/Sry, I'm taken/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.71 - 22/21/77
    Words: 413
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    So, tell me, what would you do?
    If I were to hold you close to me, and we just laughed.
    Would turn the other way, tell me that you had to go?

    I'd hoped for a day just like this one, for so long.
    We're nothing but content in each others embrace
    and I'm so close to being yours, all of my fears are gone.

    I'd tell you that I'm ready to take that jump,
    I'd take your hand in mine and close my eyes,
    All I need to know is that we can make it through this last road bump.

    If ever you were to leave,
    I'll be here waiting until the day when you return.
    Eventually, in time, I know our love we'll be something we can all believe.

    Sometimes I picture you in my head, all alone.
    But as the light from the first dawn breaks over the horizon, I see you.
    Ten thousand butterflies, swarm around you, like our future has always been set in stone.

    In my heart, I know, you're going to walk through this life with me.
    You're love, you're life, I hold it close to me as though you've breathed new life into my existence.
    Wide awake, now, I open my eyes and all of a sudden I realize I am free.

    Freedom begins when you get out of the cage you've built yourself in.
    And somehow, you're right here next to me, telling me what I never could hear,
    But what I've always wanted to hear, from the lips of an angel like you.
    "I love you, just as I've always loved you, and will continue to love you from now to eternity."

    I don't want promises, I don't want hope.
    I'd rather just sit and laugh away my life with you,
    I'd rather just live this life knowing instead of hoping.
    Knowing that you're here to stay, until my last breath steals you away, again.

    Tell me, what will you do?
    If I'm to cry for many more years, and cause us both pain.
    Will you take me in, beneath your wings, and say that you never have to go?
    I can still say that I believe in you.

    For you, I will not stop smiling, through the dark nights and horrors that await.
    I will not falter, my dearest friend.
    Because just like before, you are here, saving me.




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