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    dots Submission Name: Blue Eyesdots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    23/Female/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.68 - 277/293/232
    Words: 252
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Romance
    Total Views: 580
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1451



    Description:
       Not finished, but I don't care, I beat writer's block!


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    dotsBlue Eyesdots
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    I get lost everytime I look into your blue eyes
    The butterflies in my stomach take me by surprise
    I know I shouldn't think about you this way.
    I can't help it, you've been on my mind all day.
    I sneak a peek when I think you're not looking at me
    I blush and try to turn away before you can see.
    I know I shouldn't think about you this way
    I can't help myself, I don't know what else to say.

    When I look in your blue eyes
    They take me for a ride.
    I'm lost and I'm gone
    lets get away for awhile.
    When I look in your blue eyes
    They take me for a ride
    Come take me for a ride.

    I try hard not to read too much in what I see
    Think that you have some kind of feelings for me.
    I know you shouldn't always be on my mind this way
    I can't help myself, and I hope to see you today.
    I melt inside when you turn and look over here
    But getting hurt again is my greatest fear.
    And I know you shouldn't have this effect on me
    I can't help myself, I think I'm going crazy.

    When I look in your blue eyes
    They take me for a ride.
    I'm lost and I'm gone
    lets get away for awhile.
    When I look in your blue eyes
    They take me for a ride
    Come take me for a ride.




    Submitted on 2010-02-12 07:33:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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