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    dots Submission Name: the black hole in the sundots

    Author: leocrates
    Elite Ratio:    4.95 - 103/34/38
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Rant/Passion
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       forgiveness is weakness

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    dotsthe black hole in the sundots

    well you did it, its over, almost
    the world is ready,
    just waiting to die again
    believing that reincarnation
    or reiteration
    will take over


    the end is nigh and your repentance
    is fraud, and no longer

    it is as rocks are to the hungry...

    it is too late to save the world
    for all of you

    and for me
    i so far refuse to save
    what doesn't deserve saving
    so go tell it on the mountain

    all of the failure to decree
    all of the failure to be moral
    all of the demands on god
    all of the false covenants
    all of the waste
    all of the godly

    waiting to be ruined,

    free will
    no longer free

    the end is nigh
    just push my buttons more,
    we can always try suicide

    repentance never earned anyone reprieve
    redemption is the attempt of cowards to have a second chance lined up for when they show them true selves for what they are. and everyone wants them crucified...

    Submitted on 2010-02-12 14:42:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ready for some real change, huh? Yes, we who think too much or too hard soon recognize the futility of being sorry. I'll leave that statement ambigious deliberately.

    Free will? What an interesting concept! It does not even rise to the level of illusion.

    I am what I am - Popeye
    | Posted on 2010-02-23 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      nicely done! I like several parts but my favorite

    "redemption is the attempt of cowards to have a second chance lined up for when they show them true selves for what they are. and everyone wants them crucified..."

    Left me wondering... I think alot of your readers can relate...Again great job!

    | Posted on 2010-02-17 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      That is actually well ... I am not sure whether to tell you it is a deep thought or a feeling that you were deeply wronged...let down maybe. I can almost feel the anger, the pain, that has welled up inside and spilling on to the page. It is something few will truly understand and fewer still who will admit that they actually understand what you are trying to say. I can't say that I completely understand but I think I can see where it is you are coming from. It makes me feel sad that you feel that you and everyone else around you in beyond redemption, it feels as though you were saying " You hurt me, I hurt you, We all got to hell in a merry hand basket! Mwuhaahaaa!!!" It seems to me that it's not only that that you were trying to say...there's more to it than that but I can't seem to put my finger on it. It is as though there is a lingering sadness to it, almost like a wish to be proven wrong.

    It was my pleasure to read this.

    Thank you.
    | Posted on 2010-02-12 00:00:00 | by Raye | [ Reply to This ]

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