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    dots Submission Name: The last dropdots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 810
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1013



    Description:
       "The last drop" to my valentine. (She does not exist. A dream that can never come true is a dream that should never come true.)

    Commentary Type: Blast me if you wish. If you like it or not,,, say it......


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    dotsThe last dropdots
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    A drop that fell down in the earth with its soul,
    A drop that cried from mother earth herself,
    A drop that said my dream..'don't come true',
    A drop that ends in this life stream ...adieu.

    A light to pass away in the mist,
    of clouds that said 'never die again'.
    A dream just that she walked past away,
    a dream that said to live never again.

    Beaten to death was a the little hope of mine,
    a man who cried for a dream left behind.
    A man that woke and never dried his tears,
    for the last drop of a tear did he cry....did he cry.

    Walk did he with a smile on his face,
    walk did he with pride on his face.
    For the mask that said nothing at all,
    was sorrow in life with a tear in disgrace.

    Love for it was never to exist,
    my love my dream, I long to live.
    Withers away the time in life,
    My love my dream, my last tear to dry.......




    Submitted on 2010-02-13 06:18:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. I liked this piece. Maybe because I too have that dream that she'd...

    Stupid emotions, I feel the water works starting. haha. I swear, I'm a girl at heart.

    Anyhow, this was a great work my friend. The pauses...they were just right, the words, picked so carefully and so cleverly...god, I feel in love with this piece. Consider it favored.

    And thank you for sharing.
    | Posted on 2010-04-01 00:00:00 | by Dark Dann | [ Reply to This ]


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