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    dots Submission Name: Oh woe is me...dots
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    Author: Xiallia
    ASL Info:    17-F-Missing Osaka[IL]
    Elite Ratio:    1.49 - 3/23/32
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Longing
    Total Views: 541
    Average Vote:    4.6667
    Bytes: 589



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    dotsOh woe is me...dots
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    Alas...Does My Father Want me? I should hope he wants his own loins, his own blood...Oh woe is me if he need not want me anymore.
    I shall weep the deepest sorrows as my heart would have been ripped out of my bleeding body and teared to shreds by his animals in the coldest of ways.....

    Oh Father....
    Do you Want me?
    Oh Father...
    Do you care for me?
    ...
    Do you love me...?

    My Sorrowful Hymn that rushes through my Instrument
    Speaks my Worry...
    Let the song waves reach his heart to give me the answer...




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      He probably wants you BACK. As a father, I grieve for my little children who might as well have died because they are now so big and powerful with more money than me, and are trying to control me so that although I'm waiting all week for a phone call, when it comes I spend the rest of the day kicking furniture and planning to move to the Aleutians.

    So where are those lovely, loving little friends I used to have, and why are the monsters they have turned into so discontented, and why is that supposed to be my fault?

    | Posted on 2010-03-28 00:00:00 | by lakesblue | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh Dear...
    I can certainly feel the loneliness in this.
    A few tweaks here and there, but it is perfect.
    We all wonder if someone wants us, and we all hope that they know how we feel if we ever lost them or anything.
    We just hope and wait..
    Wishing they give us the answer.
    *nods*
    I love it

    ~Shuyin Yamato.
    | Posted on 2010-02-16 00:00:00 | by Shuyin | [ Reply to This ]


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