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    dots Submission Name: Boredoms Ambrosiadots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 261
    Average Vote:    2.0000
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    dotsBoredoms Ambrosiadots
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    Where was it written
    This life should be born into death
    The stone cold hearts
    Reign down upon you
    And turn the gift
    To a tortuous path

    And yet
    The robot feels inside its cocoon
    And all the thinks and things
    It things and thinks it needs
    The agony binds
    To the trap

    Cold clamour for attention
    A perpetual advert
    To the bright and shiny enslavement
    This life of commercial footballism
    Cuts at the root without concern
    And the robot
    Plays along

    Where is it written
    Our children should be born into this death
    To sell their souls
    For the pennies worth
    The stone cold hearts
    Reign down upon them
    Turning the gift
    Into another tortuous path

    Sheep before the muck shovel of television
    The sucking straw
    Without opinion
    Without question on
    Your little electrified teat of boredoms ambrosia
    Cuts to the root without concern
    While the robots
    Play along

    Teach them by your same rigmarole
    To follow
    Blind, dumb and ignorant
    Of the sallow obituary
    Handed to them by the same blank acceptance
    Be comfortable with the chains
    Of freedom of choice
    To chose
    From the rotting pile
    The little electrified teat of monotonous nectar

    Club together
    Point the finger
    See them suffer
    All those who stand alone
    Let them starve
    Let them burn
    In your peer sanctioned acquittal of conscience

    Retire to your comfortable homes
    Where the robots
    Play along




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