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    dots Submission Name: The Moon, Sun, and Starsdots
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    Author: AcidCOKE
    ASL Info:    229/HeShe/RainbowCity
    Elite Ratio:    1.23 - 3/4/5
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
    Total Views: 918
    Average Vote:    3.5000
    Bytes: 451



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    dotsThe Moon, Sun, and Starsdots
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    Do you think the Moon has a lover.
    If it does then why does it not show up.
    What about the stars.
    Do they also have lovers.
    How do they love one another.
    Let there feelings pass through what.
    Most of all, does the sun love anyone.
    Will it ever have a lover.
    Do both th sun and the moon cry.
    If so, about what.
    What is love to the sun, moon, and stars.
    I hope they find love.




    Submitted on 2010-02-14 17:48:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The final line is extremely weak but otherwise I thought this was decent enough. You put a nice spin on things.
    | Posted on 2010-02-14 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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