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    dots Submission Name: Field of Dreamsdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Poetry/Legend
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    dotsField of Dreamsdots

    This nightmare is ending

    And with it
    In desperation the screaming
    Seeks to claw its memory

    Each blinking eye of dawn reveals
    A seemingly pointless struggle
    Clamouring for recognition
    Somewhere in its calling
    Some place inside the heart

    Darkness has swept the centuries to tinder
    And the bonfires of its tears
    Linger in the graves

    Retribution stammers fist clenched
    Through this blood
    But dies inside its piteous
    And the overwhelming love

    So many warriors
    Have come to look upon this end
    The nightmare they have fought
    To the finale of the bitter truth
    Amidst the lies
    The final proof
    Written with the strangest hand

    This nightmare is ending

    Ending upon the field of dreams called reality
    And opening into another plain
    Walks the third consciousness

    Life defined by feted creed
    Born of deceptions trickery
    Will test and attest to the mockery
    Made willing in its sacred land

    And by law alone will it stand
    To watch the fall and epochs end
    Without remorse or judgements made
    And bare witness to the triumphal cavalcade
    In the turning centuries

    Walking with the struggle
    And succeeding in the grace
    Of love

    The trick is the field of dreams called reality
    And opening into another plain
    Walks the third consciousness

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