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Blind by Darkness


Author: fishoutofwater
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Words: 149
Class/Type: Poetry /Angry
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Wrote this while listenin to my friend play a song he wrote on his guitar...


Blind by Darkness



Enter Darkness
Its so unclear
Trying to find my way
Everyone telling me where to go
Cant I do this on my own

Fuck this life
Its not real
Dreams they say
So what’s their deal
Fuck them all
They are blind
Blind by the darkness
That consumes their mind

Enter darkness
Its so unclear
Trying to find my way
Everyone telling me where to go
Cant I do this on my own

How can I make them see
I’ll be ok
This is my life
Not theirs
Fuck you
Cant you see
You’re not better then me

Enter darkness
Its so unclear
Trying to find my way
Everyone telling me where to go
Cant I do this on my own

You fucked up
Change is what you need
Sorry but that’s not for me
Say all you want
Cause I’m not listening




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