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    dots Submission Name: Blind by Darknessdots
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    Author: fishoutofwater
    Elite Ratio:    0.01 - 0/1/3
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    Description:
       Wrote this while listenin to my friend play a song he wrote on his guitar...


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    dotsBlind by Darknessdots
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    Enter Darkness
    Its so unclear
    Trying to find my way
    Everyone telling me where to go
    Cant I do this on my own

    Fuck this life
    Its not real
    Dreams they say
    So whatís their deal
    Fuck them all
    They are blind
    Blind by the darkness
    That consumes their mind

    Enter darkness
    Its so unclear
    Trying to find my way
    Everyone telling me where to go
    Cant I do this on my own

    How can I make them see
    Iíll be ok
    This is my life
    Not theirs
    Fuck you
    Cant you see
    Youíre not better then me

    Enter darkness
    Its so unclear
    Trying to find my way
    Everyone telling me where to go
    Cant I do this on my own

    You fucked up
    Change is what you need
    Sorry but thatís not for me
    Say all you want
    Cause Iím not listening




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