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    dots Submission Name: Momdots
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    Author: insanegemini
    ASL Info:    18/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.33 - 24/50/56
    Words: 293
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 545
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1830



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       yea as much as i love my mom i dont think im going to let her read this for a while. she might get a big head and get all mush, or worse she'd make fun of it lol


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    dotsMomdots
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    Wow is mom upside down
    For good reason
    Always flipping around a frown
    Okay sometimes creating one
    And destroying my pompous crown
    But never in an act of treason

    Chasing away the boys
    That were always teasin’
    Engulfing me in warm hugs
    Killing those scary bugs
    Kicking ass of all those ghetto thugs
    (Trust me she did)
    This and so much more

    Cooking food that I and everyone else adore
    Taught me hard work
    By making me scrub the floor
    I’d kick and scream and slam the door
    When she upset me or I didn’t get my way much more
    But I’d always get a case
    Of sorrow and guilt
    Go apologize
    And she’d kiss me on the side of my face

    She made me wise
    Definitely not someone I despise
    I owe my life to her
    On more than one occasion

    When darkness came
    She lit a flame
    When I was hurt
    She washed away the dirt
    When I lay crying
    She never took off flying

    They say strong and protective is dad
    But who is it that we go to when times are bad?
    When the world makes us infuriated and mad,
    When gone is everything we had,
    When we’re sick and sad?

    I don’t know how she does it
    But she will never quit
    Being amazing
    And full of bright spring
    There are a million adjectives and metaphors
    That I could use to describe mom
    But she knows how well she does her job
    True this job doesn’t always make my heart throb
    But she means best
    I guess what I mean is
    Despite all the protest
    Tension and being stressed
    I think you’re the best

    Love you mom




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      What a lovely testament to your mum......when she reads this, she will be even more proud of you than before,

    Excellent stuff from you.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2010-03-09 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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