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    dots Submission Name: Voice Unhearddots
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    Author: CopperVeins
    ASL Info:    16/f/ A place unknown
    Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 4/6/5
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 657
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    Bytes: 630



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    dotsVoice Unhearddots
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    You create a Utopia with little black lies.
    You make it's passion,
    Something you deny.
    A Utopia made from scratched out lives.
    Foraged with hands,
    You beat at night.
    Camps for the kiddies,
    With Ovens so large.

    Deaths sung so loud,
    that go unheard.
    How can the numbers you've tolled,
    Not drown your blank words.
    Your Blank words.

    And through-out History.
    No,
    It will not be your crude voice heard.
    But the voice of a girl,
    You absurdly ignored.




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