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Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 95
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Description:




Hear me



Drenched in this rain,
Help- I am drowning.
Small in my own game-
Be my friend?
I've kidded and coloured myself
All different shades of grey
I can't hide anymore.

I've shattered the illusion
And see the reflection
God, I beg of you
Let me turn my eyes away
It makes me sick.
I lack courage, I lack empathy
Help me turn away.

I can't run, and stay in this limbo
Pulling and playing with strings
Someone's heart must break,
Please, don't spare mine.
Let them see no illusion,
And leave me behind. 




Submitted on 2010-02-16 02:11:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Yeah, I think your recent work is in some way connected -or something- and has the same feel to it and is executed with precision...

My favourite line was : "Pulling and playing with strings/ Someone's heart must break"
| Posted on 2010-02-21 00:00:00 | by MidnightSun89 | [ Reply to This ]
  DAM! yet another great post! Its a shame no one else have the time to post a comment I can't be the only one who see's just how amazing this post is! You wrote this with such feeling so much passion i could feel it keep it up!!!!

Jackz
| Posted on 2010-02-18 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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