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    dots Submission Name: I beg.dots
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    Author: xxiknownowxx
    ASL Info:    16/F/GA
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 128/41/40
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsI beg.dots
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    As another thought glazed my mind
    I reminsed of everything I left behind.
    The whole road ahead is glory in your eyes
    But, I had began to wonder if it was the same in mine.

    For I pray prayers of "Lord, let me be yours, let me show them whats really there."
    'Cause they search the grounds as I once had.
    Their muzzles all dirtied in dispare, their water pans are empty and they thirst for more.
    They hurt, as once did I,
    And if they could only see your arms, for us, open wide!
    Saying, "My children, you need no longer cry, for I bare your sins from your shoulders, upon mine.

    But, Lord, won't you open up thier eyes!
    Let them see the glory of you in thier minds.
    Take thier hopelessness and put it all behind.
    Give them a still unperfect but, new life.
    Let them no longer be blind,
    For this grass has withered too long and they've sat in thier rocking chairs muttering underneath thier breath while wasting too much time.




    Submitted on 2010-02-16 15:27:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      *high five* It's awesome to meet you! It's refreshing to have someone comment positively on a faith based posting. Thank you.

    I love your message in this piece. I find it hard to pray for others as I watch them walk the same ways I did. We're so anxious for God to fix them right now that we overlook His plans for them in their own lives.

    He has taught us to love the lost sheep just as much as the ones He's found, a difficult but rewarding task. God is a personal discovery that can't be forced. As Jesus tells Peter in Matthew 16:17 "You are blessed because my Father in heaven has revealed this to you. You did not learn this from any human being..."

    There are so many times that I feel I can change how someone thinks about God just by words alone. But whenever we doubt, Jesus will reach out to reaffirm our faith in God's love. To me, there is no greater gift in life than faith. It was meant to be shared freely with others..

    I love this piece. I'm adding it to my favorites, my dear. Please keep writing, you have a beautiful gift.
    | Posted on 2010-03-10 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh...ummm...spell check this one too. I know people say "There is no spell check on ES!!!" But it is easy to copy and paste it into a word processing program and then re-copy and paste it back, ya know?

    If you spell check and correct within 24 hours I will delete this comment.

    ;-)
    | Posted on 2010-02-18 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      "Take thier hopelessness and put it all behind.
    Give them a still unperfect but, new life.
    Let them no longer be blind,
    For this grass has withered too long andd they've sat in thier rocking chairs muttering underneath thier breath while wasting too much time."

    Those are great words! And I dont know why many people read this and didnt comment but I think it is fan-freaking-tastic.

    Takes a lot to get on my faves list and this poem is going there.

    Nice job. You may be 15 but you seem wise beyond your years. You aint lying about your age just to be discrete are you?

    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2010-02-18 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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