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    dots Submission Name: For Her...dots
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    Author: Shuyin
    ASL Info:    18/M/Traveling alot
    Elite Ratio:    3.04 - 1/2/2
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 453
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       I suck....completely...
    Sorry Sai.....


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    dotsFor Her...dots
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    Note: I can't believe I'm writing this....First time writing this stuff

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    She graces me with her voice everyday
    Her smile is like nothing else.

    To hold her in my arms is never enough.
    To kiss her is another world completely.

    I am her protector, I am her Guardian
    And a Brother is how I'll stay.

    Hurting her is like hurting me
    Which is always a bad thing.

    My heart will always belong to her
    And to no one else.

    Her falling into my arms is heaven in itself.

    Her warmth is Dear
    Her Voice is kind
    Movements so clear
    My eye are blind,
    Such beauty she has
    Inside and out
    I love her so dearly,
    I'm tempted to shout.

    Years before today I was cold and alone.
    But you found me and gave me a place in your home.
    Into the light you surely brought me
    It is where It will stay, if you want me,

    Always guarding your person
    And your heart so.
    I make sure no one can hurt you.

    And our love continues to grow.

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    Note: I suck at poetry!!




    Submitted on 2010-02-17 05:12:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was good, it would be hard to believe you would suck at poems. The feelings that you express in the writing was very genuine and sincere. Your words became a thousand painting a picture. in the line where you talk about "her in your arms is a heaven" I would change it to "is heaven." It was very clear and understanding, and from this I know how much this person means to you and how much you would give for her. Id say that you did pretty good.




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