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    dots Submission Name: Lazy Lauradots
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    Author: catechism42
    ASL Info:    31 / M / Pasadena, TX
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 5/18/33
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 569
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    dotsLazy Lauradots
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    Laura lazily lounged amid lavendar hills so far from urbania that she could see in the eve of the day streaking tails of shooting stars crashing against the darkening sky, and with a tear in her eye, she would sigh and sink into reverie.




    Submitted on 2010-02-17 17:04:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      not bad, not bad.

    it sort of grows on you, in a good way,
    starts out like an exercise and transforms.

    i feel the close would be more light and shade, more poignant as,

    and sink to reprieve.

    not bad, not bad.
    | Posted on 2010-02-19 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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