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    dots Submission Name: Chaosdots

    Author: catechism42
    ASL Info:    31 / M / Pasadena, TX
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 5/18/33
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Wild and furious, escalatingly intense, seductive, addictive, manic and driving, peeling towards me like ribbons of light scattering fierce shifting forms everywhere. Fiery storm of restless, relentless motion cracking asunder the firmament and foundation.

    Screams howling past my ears with deafening silence, gnawing me from the inside out with fear and panic, anxiety stripping away reason, pain rending my illusions of comfort.

    Bleed and cry out: Nassaia! Mek'Hamon! Nul-Rashta!
    Not-Gods! Not-Beasts! Not-Named forces of the gnawed and wrent theasma!
    Belch forth your fury into the quiet void of Limbo! Pull the Abyss inside out and pour its contents into the divine fire! Unfold all that is folded, tear back all bonds and fetters! Nyjora! Speet! Speet! Fyjang!

    Submitted on 2010-02-17 17:25:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nassaia, Mek'Hamon, Nul-Rashta, Nyjora etc == please translate
    There are many words not understandable...Write at the bottom the meaning of those...then it might be more enjoyable to read.

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    At last I am seeing a quality piece in eliteskills. It was very nice of you to perfectly sync chaos. I could actually feel what you are trying to convey as if you were showing your feelings to me in front of me .....Perfection...awesome...

    Hope you write in future many like this. (Hopefully with only English :-) )
    | Posted on 2010-02-18 00:00:00 | by keestu | [ Reply to This ]

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