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    dots Submission Name: Dreamdots
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    Author: WhiteTiger
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    2.88 - 17/16/11
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 821
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1308



    Description:
       Creative title I know, couldn't think of anything else though


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    dotsDreamdots
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    Rich, dark Earth
    Cool, bright heavens
    Stretched out beneath the sky of blue, across the green blades of soil’s blanket lies a girl, myself,
    residing between the two worlds of Heaven and Earth, of body and soul…
    Of dreams
    Time holds no bearings in the state of sleep
    No anger
    Or pain
    No remorse
    Or love
    Or anything…
    …Unless imagined
    Body lain to rest. Mind left to wander… to endless lengths
    Rules reign cease
    Subconsciously our souls paint pictures where our minds dwell
    In peace
    Where faint beams of morning light slip between the branches of an old oak tree, leaves rustling in the
    breeze, their shadows dancing on the lush spring grass
    Savoring beauty for sweet beauty
    The only sound a meadow lark’s song and the steady rush of air of my own breathing
    Savoring the silence for sweet silence
    Until the morning light seeps through the window and I wake to the Earth
    Where all memories of the past hours escape me
    And words of explanation fail to come…
    …only to appear once again in the last moments of day and sleep takes hold of my weary eyes
    Again savoring the sweet silence
    For what it is
    nothing




    Submitted on 2010-02-18 10:37:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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