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Wind Listener


Author: clovernfoxglove
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Description:


To Mom.


Wind Listener



Mother used to say, "The Wind speaks, Rosy."

I thought I knew.

Too young, too lost to really hear.

But the Wind speaks volumes;
tells tales,
unwrites novels.
She is Mother Nature's thousands year old bard;
A singer and rich story-spinner.

Her name is something old, Navajo in orgin.

A nation of wind listeners, before the gift was lost in war.

And now I am the Wind listener,
full of the world's unspoken and spoken words.

Wind...
She strums each blade of grass- a soft vibration.
She whistles amongst the reeds like a high, thin voice.
She rocks the trees with a crescendoing lullaby,
"Whooooooooooshhhhssshhhhh"

It is a song near night for restless clouds.

It is a call for action-to bring forth rain,
an urgent message to the Wolf,

"Sing to the Moon!
For she is round and full tonight;
a complete sphere of refracted light!
Sing for Nature, for this is life.
Lift up a cry and I will carry it up,
for I am the Wind."

"The Wind speaks, Rosy"
I know Mother...I know.




Submitted on 2010-02-18 17:04:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is very beautiful. I've often heard it whisper secrets to the treetops... the leaves giggle, and the pine trees whisper back. They share some secret that only the Universe knows. The wind seduces us when it gently blows through our hair. It plays with us when it lifts our kites off the ground and tugs them. Sometimes it doesn't even know its own strength when it rages and we think it's angry, blows us down, but I think its simply as thoughtless sometimes in its rush to travel away as we are about it.
| Posted on 2010-11-09 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
  haha, yes.... i like this on second read and with a few adjustments for rhythm that speed up or slow the thing down according to the content on the ground.

and i find it very strange that you are calling the wind male, and the moon female.... awhat are you nuts?

seriously/and not seriously

never in 3 million years would i think that wind is male, and the moon female...... never, no, won't do it.... ain't gonna happen. and the part that makes me laugh out loud is that the moon and the wind are not mine to assign gender too, i guess we all have a right to that :)


(though clearly they are female and male)

so yes, i like this quite a lot, but with a few rhythm adjustments... and if you are interested i'll throw in or remove a few beats here or there and show you what i mean.

good close btw. good poem.
| Posted on 2010-02-18 00:00:00 | by theAlysonDiarys | [ Reply to This ]
  yes. i like this. (mom's know muchly). (smile).

i enjoy the personification of elements and things. they feel closer. reachable. understandable.

you have some great lines and imagry throughout. really.

too... the wolf part. i have recently just let go and howled. (not with a wolf pack unfortunatly) but with my people pack at a hidden moon. but it was glorious and felt as i imagined it would.

anyhoo... some unspecifieds and an enjoyable read.
| Posted on 2010-02-18 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
  Very enjoyable read. You have wrought into it the agelessness of time itself and the feeling of lore learnt since time began, -- began?? -- Time is forever as is our God.
Typo? S4. L3. -- if? - for of? Ted.
| Posted on 2010-02-18 00:00:00 | by edcherry | [ Reply to This ]


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