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    dots Submission Name: Lost Foreverdots

    Author: Linz
    ASL Info:    24/f/Ne
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 86/118/44
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Written about a guy that i still liked once we broke up... Lets just say i'm now happy its over.

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    dotsLost Foreverdots

    I can hear you wisper in my ear
    I'm so happy you are here
    Theres so much you need to know
    Thats all i think of now
    I don't know why or how
    You seem to have stolen my heart
    Ever since we did part
    What did you do with it
    Did it earn you a bit
    Or do you have it on display
    Showing all the disaray
    What do I do to get it back
    Now my like is out of wack
    My heart and head are gone
    Tell me how, what went wrong
    What changed, not just me
    It was the both of us, it was we
    All our friends say she's in love with you
    What did you go off and do
    Prove your not so true
    If I would of only knew
    I would never have chose to love you!

    Submitted on 2004-07-23 13:52:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its a great poem and the story element was great. its also good that you moved on from it, but writing about it is always a good thing to do.
    | Posted on 2004-07-23 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like ur poem alot. me and my ex broke up ad it hurts me still. and i know how ur feeling. but its had. alot .. its like he still has my heart an i cant move on. its like he said he loved me but has hurt me... it makes no sence. anyways i really like ur poem keep writeng and never stop. I LOVE IT!
    | Posted on 2004-07-23 00:00:00 | by natasha | [ Reply to This ]

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