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    dots Submission Name: The Weapondots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Weapondots
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    Slick accessibility is its mode
    Blank
    Cold
    In its sleek functionality of use
    Empty
    But oh so very full

    And with chill glass
    Its tricks and deceptions
    Fill the empty cups

    So full of its own cheap sickness
    It ply’s its trade of promises
    Its heroine of dreams

    With colour filled eyes it grins
    And belches out its boredom
    And appears so full to the brim, with life
    Yet
    It is a fish tank Buda
    Squatting with its lethal dosage
    The pusher of visual narcotics

    And through it spews
    All the opinions and directions
    All the chains and rigmaroles
    All the separation
    All the get on board with the latest trend
    The technological wizardry
    Of slavery

    Repetition repeat repetitious repeating repeated repeats
    The adverts
    Subliminal messages
    The news, the views, the conditions
    And the conditioning axiom of its education

    Ah, but it is such a slick and easy world
    Into which one can relinquish
    Consciousness
    And bleat with the rest of the sheep
    Into its hollow void
    Of entertainment

    It is a fish tank Buda
    Squatting with its lethal dosage
    The pusher of visual, mental and spiritual narcotics
    And fridge freezer magnets





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      As a martial arts enthusiast the title of this one intrigued me , but I found I felt sorry for this one . I guess he just didn't cut the muster . I hope you have better luck in the future .
    | Posted on 2010-03-01 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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